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In these bright blue depths
Swimming with mystery
Memory upon memory
Rising to the surface
As I look into your eyes.

That night,
Deep in our history,
Each kiss bringing us closer
To the true definition of love.
Spiritual; our bodies and minds united
The morning light our only hindrance
The only shadow to our happiness.

But now as we stand face to face,
Our mutual presence
Sparking the same images to appear,
The same lines to be heard
In our pained minds
Old, forgotten words
Meaningless to others
But send us into a different world
A world devoid of happiness
A world filled with misery

Half of my heart aching in longing
Convincing my mind
That we were made for each other.
The other half crying out
Trying to be heard
Over the passion of the other.
Wary and cautious;
Urging me to step backwards
And seek out
What drew us apart
All those years ago.
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Hope you enjoy :) Please try and be kind - I'm only just starting out ;P
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*MistressofQuills Aug 13, 2012  Student Writer
this is beautiful!
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~EnchantedImagination Aug 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much :D :D
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*MistressofQuills Aug 13, 2012  Student Writer
you're welcome:)
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Mood: Love ~renpm100 Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. I love it.
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~EnchantedImagination Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :D
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~renpm100 Aug 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem :)
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~EnchantedImagination Aug 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :D
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You are welcome :)
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~NotenSMSK Aug 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is a well written work. but... it doesn't really get to me. Let me put it this way. I like the theme; it is practical, people can relate to it and as a story line it is well put. No confusions!. What I might have wanted was a little rhyming. For two reasons, the first of which I can properly explain.

1. The memory/mystery in the first stanza gave off a feeling that there might be rhyming. (ignore this feeling of mine completely)

2. I think it was because two or three phrases made a complete sentence that it seemed like you broke a prose into pieces.

Now I might sound harsh :( (I DID read the description) but I said all this so that you improve :) Actually you might disregard my opinion completely! After all I have a strange way of thinking. But don't get disheartened. I am not an expert writer or critic; I just tell honest things, so I hope you improve :)
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